Door hogaye kab ke humPhir bhi tujhe mehsoos karte hai hum
Najane kahan chupe ho...
Phir bhi teri aahat mehsoos karte hai hum
Jaane kaisa khel hai ye
Na tum mere ho,
Na main tumhari
Phir bhi ...kuch hai hamara
Tera naam sunte hai..
Toh dil mein ek ahat si hoti hai
Tujhe najane kyun dhoondte hai
Dhoond kar phir bhool jaate hai
Teri chaukhat pe mila tha sirf dard
Paar ki thi tune bewafai ki har hadd
Toda iss qadar mera dil
Rehgaye tere dard ke nishaan
Har qadam teri raah mein dhoka paaya
Phir bhi najane kyun rehta hai mere sang
Tera hi Saaya.....
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16 comments:
Beautiful:)
@ Ash is it :) if so then thank you
Hi,
beautifully penned !
But, shouldn't Phir Bhi be two words rather than Phirbi ? :D
Cheers,
Amit
I am ahead of LMR, ask Ms.R for its full form :P
@ Amit...Thank's..Ummm i'll correct it now :) & yea ur ahead :P
really beautiful .. u made me wish i could write smthing this good in hindi !! :)
@ Pretty :D that comment made me smile coz like half n hr ago i jus left someone a comment saying "I wish i could write like that" :)
it was wrapped beautifully dear!
:)
I loved the way it ended... m glad the ending was the source of the title...
aakhri 3 lines mein jaan thi!
bahut acha thought tha... could feel what u were trying to convey throughout!
:)
well done!
keep writing!!
@ Pulkit thanks :)i like the last 3 lines alot !
lovely 2 c ur comments again :)
why do we love despite so much pain??? why ?? why ???
@ Vinnie...because in LOVE we have hope :)thats why even after our heart breaks we do it all over again...HOPING that maybe that time round it'l work !:)
Another Good poem from you...
I have written few such poems and drafted them many times... But wouldnt really dare to post them as they are painful like this one of yours..
keep writing :-)
Cheers
A few corrections can result in making it better..
Cheers
Would u like to share the code for top commentors..?
I can dedicate this one to a couple of people :) Awesomeness loaded.
@ Mahesh would love to see your's do share them someday :) wil post the code in ur shoutbox.
@ Ms.R DEDICATIONS...hmmm nice :)
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