Zindagi ke lamhe satane lage
khushi se door hum hone lage
veeran si hogayi meri duniya
khushi se door hum hone lage
veeran si hogayi meri duniya
Do not say a little in many words but a great deal in a few.
Posted by fms1988 at 5/17/2009 08:41:00 pm
15 comments:
nice:)
i promise my next would be a hindi poem :)
Fatima, I'm going thru sumthing like this ryt now. :) Thanks for writing this one. :)
@ Amit cant wait to read it :)
@ Ms.R Hope u feel better soon,tk cre keep smiling :)
fms...me in such happy mood..this sad poem failed to make me feel......tanha.........hahaha!!
i love talking to myself....me best friend of myself :P
Hey Dear...
Don't feel so lonely..we are all with you...so cheer up :)
@ Neeraj me also in a good mood today this i wrote a few weeks ago :)
@ Priya im happpy :D jus wrote this few wks back when i was feelin low
Bahot khob :-)
Good Poem... I agree with CutePriya, Don't feel lonely you have so many people around you who love and care for you. So, be with them and enjoy what you are blessed with.
Keep smiling :)
I liked it...but i felt there was something missing...
From first line till end i found the pain u expressed in each line...:)
a little explanation about the cause, would have added more meaning to it...
That was my thought.....:)
Other than that its fine as the others u wrote...while are equally filled with pain..:)
Cheers
@ Wild Child & GND thnks a ton :D
@Mahesh your opinions are always appreciated :) I didn't express any cause bcoz everyone feels this way at some point..when we are low & we all have diff reasons for it ..so i left it that way :) short & to the point.
I feel poems are the only thing in which u can express hundred things in short way...
So don't leave anything... Everyone expresses his/her things differently..
I think everyone would love to see everything that comes from a poet...:)
Go ahead from next time..
See you around..:)
aap tanha math rahiye...hum sab hain na:)
take care yaar!
@ Vinnie hum tanha nahi hai..bass kabhi kabhi udaas ho jate hai tab ye sab likh liya karte hai :P
wow!
Rane
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